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Hello! I'd like how the originality of the story blends in the real world -- at some sort. ^^"
Though, one thing I've noticed, some parts of your story lines are almost cut, but somehow it's okay. I really noticed how you're very easy to write these words since all of the kids these days are easy to socialize. :)
I like Lance's story since it revolves around him, and if you may, I'd like to ask this: How did Lance got his power in the first place? Does his parents have one?
Sorry. I'm just curious, I guess you would probably answer my question at the next part of the story.
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KathraW Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
Hey ^-^

Thank you so much for the critique :huggle:

For your questions. As you may or may not know, this is actually the second novel of the series; the first one explaining in detail what happened to my dear Lance. In chapter six of my first novel :[link] he explains it (he's only 17 there and not 6). <--I felt like giving you a link would be easier than trying to type it :XD:

Though in their later chapters it is mentioned, it just doesn't explain much since it was previously explained.

Once again, thank you for the critique. I'm glad it could 'blend in the real world' and give off that feel. I was aiming for something like that :rose:
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imdangel Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I love the link you gave me. :heart:

And thank you, my questions are answered, so that explains everything. Lace is so cute :blush:
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KathraW Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
Good :heart:

I'm glad you think so ^^ Poor baby goes through a lot, but he finds a way to smile :rose:
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